Comments on: Don’t be a literary prude: How to write with personality

By: Ranting Lunatic

Ranting Lunatic — Sun, 13 Mar 2011 11:07:50 +0000

@Method vs. Madness: Thanks for the great advice. I hate it when my prose is littered with too many triple dots (or ellipsis) as that makes it look like it was written by a 13 year old girl.
For those who would jump on me for using them in the paragraph, I’m using the Comic Strip Ellipsis effect. After all this is a post about breaking to rules for creative effect.
In this case, I think the space before is not required, as the desired effect is to build anticipation.
@Juliette: The quotation marks were there to signify that I was quoting the healthy food gurus.

By: Jill Whalen

Jill Whalen — Sat, 12 Feb 2011 08:31:54 +0000

Those who write with style will rule the Internet.
That is all.

By: Pashmina

Pashmina — Fri, 11 Feb 2011 10:57:37 +0000

Rebecca/Juliette: But who came up with these rules? And why do we trust them for writing for our audiences?
Ian, if you haven’t already, do check out Rudolf Flesch’s How to Write Speak & Think More Effectively. Loved it! He lists 25 Rules, some of which are completely the opposite of Trimble’s. Like, #2 Use contractions. Or how about #4 Use the first person. #22 Use direct questions.
Flesch also wrote Why Johnny Can’t Read and another personal favorite, The Art of Plain Talk.

By: Juliette Cowall

Juliette Cowall — Fri, 11 Feb 2011 09:12:29 +0000

I’m with Rebecca. Learn the rules before you break them. Isn’t that true of every industry?
Method vs. Madness: Was your post supposed to be a parody? An apostrophe does not signify plural (comma’s). What were the quotation marks doing around “a dash of balsamic vinegar”? “triple dashes”? They’re called ellipses – and they’re separated by a space both before and after.

By: Method vs Madness

Method vs Madness — Thu, 10 Feb 2011 21:32:29 +0000

Great example Ranting, there seems to be a couple of small issues tripping you up.
Firstly, I think you just need to define how you use your triple dots (…). I only use them for a pause effect, to gain some impact, or let the reader know that the sentence continues below.
Something else you could use is the mighty dash (-), this is great to highlight a significant point.
The semi-colon looks too formal and I don’t really know what you want it to do, probably because they’re not commonly used. Although I find colons can be very useful before a comma-separated or bullet-point list.
I also find that comma’s can be used in exactly the same way as in formal writing.
My version would be something like this…
I love steak, egg and chips – like seriously. But now I have to eat chicken, steamed veggies and get this, to make it less bland… “a dash of balsamic vinegar!”

By: Ian

Ian — Thu, 10 Feb 2011 11:35:14 +0000

@Ranting I think the book can help regardless, but it goes pretty deep into how to simplify and make your writing more accessible. I suspect that’d help in the case you describe.

By: Rebecca L.

Rebecca L. — Thu, 10 Feb 2011 06:59:20 +0000

Writing rules definitely are made to be broken, but I’ll add the caveat that they’re best broken when the writer does so knowingly, using it for style instead of out of ignorance. The latter often sounds uneducated or unprofessional to my ear. And personally, while I’m happy to throw the rules out when it suits me, I still can’t bring myself to end with a preposition or split an infinitive, sorry. ;-)

By: Ranting Lunatic

Ranting Lunatic — Thu, 10 Feb 2011 00:27:45 +0000

I have a blog where I try to focus on writing the same way that I speak, and it can be a lot harder than you would think.
I ran head first into a brick wall with the following line from a recent post. It was perfect in my head, but in writing it lost its flow and seems over punctuated;
(begin quote)
I love steak, egg and chips… like seriously. But now I have to eat chicken, steamed veggies and… get this; To make it less bland “a dash of balsamic vinegar!”
(end quote)
The tonal inflictions are lost and no matter what I tried, I couldn’t get the rhythm right, so in the end I just posted it, but I want to delete it every time I see it.
Any advice. Would the book help with the technical problem or writing as you speak?